mall parking lot crisis

Faith Plummer.                                                                September18,2013
                              THE MALL PARKING LOT CRISIS
      It was a hot day in April of 2016 we are in the town of AtlantaGeorgia we were all ready to go to school. But on this day something tragic happens between these four students. Jada,Maya,Chris,and Damon they go through the first part of there day now it's lunch time. While they are in the lunch line Maya's boyfriend is bullying Chris and Damon doesn't like it and he wants to go say something to him but Jada stops him so they go back to there table and start eating.
      Then Chris comes to there table and begins telling them what happened to him so Damon can't hold his self anymore so he goes over and begins to talk to Maya's boyfriend and then he wants to fight him cause he is asking him why is he messing with Chris and he doesn't like it when people tell him about himself.
      Then the four of them go through three more days of school with Chris being bullied and then after the third day of school they go to the mall but this day Maya doesn't want to go so Jada,Chris,and Damon go on to the mall. After the first three hours at the mall Chris says he is going out side to get some air to distress himself. Then Jada and Damon begin looking for him through the mall but they never thought to look outside to see if he is still outside.
      Then Damon decides to take a look outside to see if he is outside after 30minutes of looking on the inside of the mall then Damon is starting to worry about Chris so he calls the cops and then they come they go looking around then they find something twisted they see a sneaker and a jacket close to a garbage dumpster then they look inside and they find Chris lookin all cut up and blood everywhere when they finally pull the body out Damon goes and throws up around the other side of the dumpster. Jada texts Damon's phone to see if he found him yet and he replies yeah and you might want to come check to come see this so she comes out and sees what it is going on and she begins to cry about 

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